Comments for The Love that Changed Him: Page 1

hmmmm, if you truly feel that way about an actual demon (where is the proof? We can assign any number of known names to any number of things) then you seriously need to seek adult assistance with this one. Given your age, that is the only comment I will make.

God Bless!

This makes me skeptical for many reasons. Firstly, a glowing Ouija board (while I've never heard of such a thing) merits a photograph being taken of it. How one could resist documenting a glowing Ouija board is beyond me. Second, you don't tell how you came to know the names of the two entities. Third, you seem way too non chalant about (1) keeping demons in your home and (2) falling in love with a demon... At 15. You also assert that mirrors are a "gateway for the dead," as if it's a known fact. Personally, I have found there are no "rules" to a discipline (if you can even call it that) as mysterious and inconsistent as the supernatural. Also, why did a mother call her 13-year-old daughter while on vacation when her kitchen appliance was kicked? Not typical mother-daughter behavior unless your mom is less mature that you.

But the most alarming information is that you report "finding out" that one entity is a demon named Kalav from England, but was cast out of heaven along with Lucifer, etc., etc. You fail to mention how you gleaned this incredibly detailed information. It has been my experience that most spirits are either reluctant to impart such intricate information or it is too difficult to communicate on such a high level with one. This interlude would be an incredible one and would seem to merit intense description other than just "I found out..." HOW did you find out? Furthermore, England was not yet even called England when Lucifer was supposedly dispelled from Heaven and was a pagan area until the medeival era--sometime around 600 AD with eventual spread of Christianity. This makes little historiographical sense to me.

Also, you neglect explaining how you fell in love with this demon. Perhaps this bit isn't integral to your story, but it seems pretty substantial in its own right. You do understand that an incubus is a male spirit that indulges in overt sexual acts with human females, correct? This is no trivial matter considering your age. A little more information here might make this aspect a little more believable.

Finally, if your parents believe all of this is merely a figment of your imagination, then why did your mother go to the trouble of contacting you at a hotel while you were in vacation? And, assuming she really was concerned, why did she not just talk to your father about it?

I hope I don't come across too critically, Reeper, but too many aspects of this story simply do not jive. You must also understand that I'm not challenging YOUR integrity, but just the validity of this story since your writing is all I have to go on here and it is lacking much, to me.

Thanks for sharing, though. Keep up the good writing.

... Incubuses usually bring their victims within an inch of their death... Some have killed their victims... Avoid demons. Ever since I messed around with that stuff things got disturbing. I barely can sleep for fear of another attack though it has not happened since. Be careful horrible things can happen when you mess around with that stuff. You probably should have got the house blessed, though I'm not sure it would have worked. After all... You said it was a high ranking demon.

HAHAHAHAHA... Oh gosh darn... That was somewhat short... And Hey, say Hi to Kal for me. Great post, and really creative in writing... It was a synopsis of the whole story but we get the idea... Again with Danice... I got shocked I thought it was my name... Hahaha... I hope Kal would appreciate the comment. For he is gosh darn hot...

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Good luck with the creative writing and with Kalav MWAH! 😆 ❤ 😊

Tonith, actually yes, I always have experiences. Once something exiting happens, I might upload another log. Actually, only my dad has remote feelings. It's odd.
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❤ ❤ Lilreeper

Honestly don't know what I think of this story, it sounds like the romantic gothic stories of the turn of the last century. Good writing. If it's all true I would think you are sensitive and apparently it runs in the family. Do you still have experiences now that you no longer live in the mobil home? I have heard of the bed shaking from other people but never heard of things being thrown at them. The incubus and succubus legends are ancient but again became popular with the repressed sexual society of the Victorian age. Still it's a great story and much luck with your writing endeavors.

Hi Theresa. Thank you for sharing your story with us, it was interesting. After reading your story, I also looked at your profile. You stated that you would like to be a writer like Stephen King and Rowlings. I see that you have a knack for creative writing, keep up the good work and you will go far. Take Care.